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what we want to do today is to take a

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look at a band night writing in task 2

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of IELTS to see what a structure is used

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in order for you to learn it and get the

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same score

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hey guys Mary Lucia from Ross iOS

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Academy as you might know IELTS writing

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is one of the skills that many

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candidates struggle with the thing is

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that you try try and try and get a six

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in the end and you always wonder why

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but is it impossible to get a higher

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score in this skill the answer is no

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one thing that many candidates are not

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aware of is that as there are different

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question types in task one and two in

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IELTS writing you should follow a

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different paragraph structure in each

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which is the key to a higher score

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what we want to do today is to take a

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look at one in task two and analyzes a

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structure on a very good sample answer

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and if you want to boost your scoring

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IELTS writing you can visit our website

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and use our writing course you can go to

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www.ra sales.com so are you ready let's

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get it started

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so here's the question a statement in

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task two

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there are many things that can motivate

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people to perform well in their work

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as you can see this is the question

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statement and what we should do is to

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read it carefully and highlight the

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keywords

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now the next part would be the question

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that we are asked regarding this

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question statement which says

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what do you feel is the best motivation

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to do well at work

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here we are asked a question about the

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given question statement

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by reading it we can understand that

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this is a question type that we are

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dealing with in task two which is a

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direct question and we should obviously

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follow a different paragraph structure

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for that and here is the paragraph

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structure

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first you have the introduction

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paragraph then body paragraph one body

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paragraph two and the conclusion

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paragraph

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now let's write our own essay based on

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this structure here we go with the

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introduction paragraph

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to perform well in a job people have to

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be motivated

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I believe that there are multiple

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strategies for employers to encourage

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their employees

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the most obvious one is the salary

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however job satisfaction and the ability

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to help people are other methods of

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improving performance at work

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so in the first sentence of the

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paragraph We have paraphrased the

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question statement using some direct

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synonyms

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in the following sentences we have given

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the answer to the question saying that

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by a good salary job satisfaction and

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helping other people we can be motivated

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to work better and do well at work

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so as you see we have mentioned three

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here

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the point is that you should at least

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mention two because you want to get into

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detail of each in a separate paragraph

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the body paragraphs

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now let's see how we can write the first

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body paragraph

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for the majority of the people receiving

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their salary at the end of the month is

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their motivation

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this is because money is necessary to

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fulfill the most basic needs and other

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materialistic desires

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in other words employees see these

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opportunities when receiving their

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salary and therefore work to achieve

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money

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furthermore performing well in a job can

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often lead to Promotions with higher pay

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packages

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for instance in most German companies

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the staff try to stand out positively in

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their jobs as they will get a higher

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salary which is a key motivational tool

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for many Workforce participants

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so here in the first body paragraph We

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have gotten into detail of the first

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motivational tool so in the very first

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sentence of the paragraph which is the

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topic sentence we have clearly mentioned

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it and then in the following sentences

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we have given some explanation and

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finally an example using the appropriate

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Expressions to show each of them

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now let's write the second body

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paragraph

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however money is far from being the only

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incentive

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another aspect affecting performance is

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job satisfaction

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this is to say if a person is

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comfortable in their work they are more

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likely to perform well

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therefore this motivational tool

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interlinks with salary as when people

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are content and perform well the chances

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of promotion increase

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for some individuals though only their

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passion can drive them for example the

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salary of the humanitarian jobs are

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often not very high but those choosing

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to work in this field are often very

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passionate due to their personal

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interest in the job

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so here in the second body paragraph We

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have gotten into detail of the second

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motivational tool so in the very first

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sentence of the paragraph which is the

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topic sentence we have clearly mentioned

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it and in the following sentences we

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have given some explanations and finally

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an example using the appropriate

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Expressions to show each of them

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and now let's write the conclusion

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paragraph which is our last paragraph

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here

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in conclusion while income might be the

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most common motivational Factor it is

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unusual to be the sole incentive for

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working hard and some people are

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motivated due to other reasons

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eventually in that conclusion paragraph

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We have concluded all Dimension details

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throughout the essay paraphrasing what

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we had already mentioned in the

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introduction paragraph

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foreign

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guys in this video we took a look at

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writing in task 2 of IELTS exam and

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learning details how we should write it

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in order to get our desired result

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you can also write your own writings

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send it to our examiners and get a

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comprehensive feedback on it plus your

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score in each criteria

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take a look at the link we have put in

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the video description

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stay tuned for the next videos and see

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you very soon

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in this course you will have a series of

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educational videos in which you will

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learn each and every tip you will need

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in specific details for both General and

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academic modules if question type is

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double question or attached to each

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video you will have the PDF files for

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each question type including the

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paragraph structure the expressions and

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the techniques you can apply which have

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all been taught in the videos to make

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sure that you learn everything properly

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in each video we will write an essay a

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letter or a report by using the tips

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that you have learned moreover something

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to help you in this section is the

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different question samples we have put

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recommend you to use our writing

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