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what we want to do today is to take a

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look at a band 9 writing in task 1 of

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general ielts exam to see what a

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structure is used in order for you to

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learn it and get the same score

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as you might know ielts writing is one

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of the skills that many candidates

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struggle with

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the thing is that you try try and try

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and get a six in the end and you always

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wonder why

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but is it impossible to get a higher

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score in this skill the answer is no

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one thing that many candidates are not

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aware of is that as there are different

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question types in task 1 and task 2 of

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ielts writing you should follow a

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different paragraph structure in each

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which is the key to a higher score

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what we want to do today is to take a

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look at one in task one and analyze its

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structure on a very good sample answer

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are you ready

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let's get started

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so here's the question

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you and your family are living in rented

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accommodation in an english-speaking

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country

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you are not satisfied with the condition

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of some of the furniture

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write a letter to the landlord

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in your letter

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introduce yourself

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explain what is wrong with the furniture

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say what action you would like the

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landlord to take

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so as you see here we have a formal

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letter since it should be written to the

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landlord

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besides there are three bullet points

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asking us for specific information that

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should be mentioned in the letter

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when you see a question like this the

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first thing after you have realized

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whether this is a formal or an informal

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letter is to think of the ideas that you

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want to elaborate on and the way you

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want to cover the bullet points

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okay

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now we know that this is a formal letter

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we should point out some specific

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information in order to cover the bullet

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points

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what's next

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exactly to think of the paragraph

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structure that we should follow

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this is super important as the correct

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paragraph structure can mark you up

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now i will show you the paragraph

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structure that you should follow in a

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formal letter and you'll see how simple

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it has always been and only because of

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not knowing that you had been losing

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mark

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so

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the structure is

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first of all in the beginning you say

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dear sir or madam

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then you mention the purpose of the

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letter for example you say

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i am just writing with regard to

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then you talk about the first bullet

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point

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the second bullet point the third one

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and finally kind regards comma

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and your name

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so

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let's see how we can write this writing

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following the structure that we just

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talked about

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dear mr smith

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so this is the very first part of the

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letter

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we have used the last name of the

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landlord but if you don't know who you

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are writing the letter to you can simply

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say dear sir or dear madam now we go on

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like this

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i am writing with regard to the bad

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condition of some pieces of the

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furniture in the house my family and i

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have rented so now we have started a new

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paragraph talking about the purpose of

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the letter remember

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this is not a long paragraph and you

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only mention the reason why you are

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writing the letter

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now the next paragraph

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i am your tenant from flat 3 on

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riverside street

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we met each other when i signed the

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rental agreement in your office

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as i had just moved to the country with

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my parents

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we decided to rent the place you offered

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us as it was freshly renovated and

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spacious

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from what i remember there was a number

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of people who were interested in the

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place but we got the house since we came

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to a compromise

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so in this paragraph as we should cover

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the first bullet point we have only

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introduced ourselves but as it is one

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paragraph and a paragraph shouldn't be

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too short we have given some details

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about us and the day that we rented the

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house

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now the next paragraph i have lived here

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for six months now and i am writing to

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complain about some of the furniture

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as you may remember the dining table is

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in very poor condition and has uneven

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legs

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it also does not match the dining chairs

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as there are too low to be comfortable

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for a table of that height

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when i first pointed this out to you you

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agreed to provide a brand new dining set

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however you have not done so and i would

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really like to resolve this matter as

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soon as possible

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so as you see in this paragraph which is

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the next paragraph we are covering the

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second bullet point which is about

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explaining what is wrong with the

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furniture

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please notice that we have dedicated one

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separate paragraph to this bullet point

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and now the next paragraph

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if it is more convenient for you perhaps

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you could simply replace the table by

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finding one of a suitable height for the

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shares

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besides that a second option could be to

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send someone to fix it so that you would

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not have to pay a big amount of money on

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a new one

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this would solve the problems without

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too much cost so i hope you agree to

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these proposed solutions

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so in this paragraph we are covering the

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last bullet point which is asking about

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which action you would like the landlord

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once again a separate paragraph is

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dedicated to this bullet point

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and finally we say

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looking forward to hearing from you

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yours sincerely martinus huffy

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very well guys in this video we took a

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look at a formal letter and learned in

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details how we should write it in order

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to get our desired result

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you can also write your own writing send

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it to our examiners and get a

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comprehensive feedback on it plus your

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score in each criteria

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take a look at the link we have put in

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the video description

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stay tuned for the next videos and see

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you very soon

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in this course you will have a series of

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educational videos in which you will

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learn each and every tip you will need

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in specific details for both general and

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academic modules next question type is

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double question or

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attached to each video you will have the

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pdf files for each question type

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including the paragraph structure the

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expressions and the techniques you can

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apply which have all been taught in the

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videos

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to make sure that you learn everything

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properly in each video we will write an

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essay a letter or a report by using the

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tips that you have learned moreover

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something to help you in this section is

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the different question samples we have

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put for you to write your own writing

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about

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this isn't everything we strongly

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recommend you to use our writing

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correction services as well so that our

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examiner can give you a written and

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ready for the real test join us to

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