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what we want to do today is to take a

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look at one of the latest questions in

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IELTS writing task 2 to see what a

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structure is used in order for you to

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learn it and get the same score

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hey guys mayor news here from Ross IELTS

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Academy as you might know IELTS writing

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is one of the skills that many

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candidates struggle with

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the thing is that you try all the time

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and you get a six in the end and you

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always wonder why

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but is it impossible to get a higher

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score in this skill the answer is no

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one thing that many candidates are not

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aware of is that as there are different

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question types in Task 1 and task 2 of

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iOS writing you should follow a

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different paragraph a structure in each

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which is the key to success

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what we want to do today is to take a

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look at one in task two and analyzes the

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structure on a very good sample answer

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but first please like this video And

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subscribe to our YouTube channel and if

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you want to boost your scoring IELTS

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writing you can visit our website and

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use our writing course you can simply go

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to

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www.rosius.com now if you're ready we

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can get it started

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as you see this is the question

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statement and what we should do is to

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read it carefully and highlight the

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keywords

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now the next part would be the question

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that we are asked about this question

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statement which says

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what are these problems and how could

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they be reduced

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here we are asked a question about the

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given question statement and by reading

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it we can realize what question type we

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are dealing with and here we have a

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problem solution question and here is

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the paragraph structure we should follow

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for that

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first we have the introduction paragraph

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then body paragraph one body paragraph

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two and conclusion paragraph

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now let's write our essay based on this

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structure here we go with the

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introduction paragraph

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the increasing amount of violence that

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is shown regularly in films has been a

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cause of concern for some time

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the problem this causes is that such

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films make a violence appear

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entertaining exciting and even something

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to be copied

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however it seems to be increasingly

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clear that by taking serious actions

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these problems can be solved

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in the very first sentence of the

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paragraph We have paraphrased the

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question statement by using some direct

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synonyms

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in the next sentences we have given the

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answer to the questions mentioning the

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problem and solution

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you should at least mention one problem

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and one solution because we want to get

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into detail of each in a separate

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paragraph are body paragraphs

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now let's write the first body paragraph

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first of all those who enjoyed such

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films eventually stop associating the

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violence with any real consequences

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in other words they lose their sense of

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reality and no longer take violence

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seriously or have any sympathy with the

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victims

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another worrying trend is that in these

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films the heroes are shown as people to

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be admired even though they are very

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violent characters

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this leads impressionable people to

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believe that they can gain respect and

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admiration by copying this aggressive

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behavior and so the levels of violence

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increase

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for example I read in the newspaper that

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a German 10 year old boy had physically

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punished his little brother as he was

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trying to imitate the violent Act of an

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actor in a movie

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here in the first body paragraph we

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talked about the problem this issue can

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cause so in the first sentence of the

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paragraph which is the topic sentence we

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have clearly mentioned it and then in

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the following sentences we have given

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some explanations and examples by using

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some Expressions to show each of them

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now let's write the second body

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paragraph

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what is needed to combat these problems

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is definite action

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in other words the government should

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regulate the film industry on the one

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hand and provide better education on the

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besides producers must be prevented from

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showing meaningless violence as fun in

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their films

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instead films could emphasize that

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tragic consequences of violent acts and

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this would educate people especially

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young people to realize that violence is

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for example the modifications that the

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Canadian government has been making in

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the film industry in the last 10 years

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in order to avoid social violence has

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contributed to a more peaceful Society

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among the others

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so in the second body paragraph we have

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talked about the solution to the problem

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and in the first sentence of the

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paragraph which is the topic sentence we

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have mentioned it the solution and in

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the next sentences we have given some

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explanation and examples related to that

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solution

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and finally the conclusion paragraph

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to conclude I think that viewing

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violence as entertainment May indeed

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cause serious social problems and that's

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the only way to improve this situation

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is by regulating the industry and

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educating the public about the real

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human suffering that such violence

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finally in the conclusion paragraph We

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have concluded all the mentioned details

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throughout the essay by paraphrasing

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what we had already mentioned in the

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introduction paragraph

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very well guys in this video we took a

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look at our writing in the second task

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of IELTS exam and we learned together

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how we should apply some strategies and

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the correct paragraph structure to get

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our desired result

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you can also write your own writings

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send it to our examiners and get a

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comprehensive feedback on it plus your

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score and its criteria you can take a

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look at the link we have put in the

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video description

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stay tuned for the next videos and see

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you very soon

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in this course you will have a series of

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educational videos in which you will

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learn each and every tip you will need

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in specific details for both General and

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academic modules if this question type

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is double question or

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in this video you will have the PDF

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files for each question type including

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the paragraph structure the expressions

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and the techniques you can apply which

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have all been taught in the videos to

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make sure that you learn everything

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properly in each video we will write an

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essay a letter or a report by using the

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tips that you have learned moreover

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something to help you in this section is

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the different question samples we have

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put for you to write your own writing

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about

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this isn't everything we strongly

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recommend you to use our writing

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correction Services as well so that our

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examiner can give you a written and

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video feedback and make sure you're

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ready for the real testing join us to

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become our next successful candidate