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what we want to do today is to take a

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look at one of the latest ielts writing

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questions in task two to see what a

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structure is used in order for you to

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learn it and get the same score hey guys

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magnus here from ross ios academy as you

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might know ielts writing is one of the

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skills that many candidates struggle

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with

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the thing is that you try try and try

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and get a sixth in the end and you

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always wonder why

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but is it impossible to get a higher

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score in this skill

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the answer is no

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one thing that many candidates are not

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aware of is that as there are different

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question types in task 1 and 2 of io's

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writing you should follow a different

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paragraph structure in each which is the

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key to a higher score

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what we want to do today is to take a

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look at one in task two and analyzes a

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structure on a very good sample but

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before that please give this video a

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thumbs up and subscribe to our youtube

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channel and if you want to boost your

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score in ielts writing you can go to our

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website and use our writing course you

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can go to www.rosios.com

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now if you're ready we can get it

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started

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so here's the question statement

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nowadays many countries have very

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cosmopolitan cities with people from all

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over the world

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as you see this is the question

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statement and what we should do is to

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read it carefully and highlight the

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keywords

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now

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the next part would be the question that

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we are asked about this question

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statement which says

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how can the government ensure that all

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these people can live together

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harmoniously

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here we are asked a question about the

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given question statement

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by reading it we can realize that the

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question type we are dealing with here

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is a direct question

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and here is the paragraph structure that

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we should follow first of all we have

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the introduction paragraph

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then body paragraph 1

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body paragraph 2 and finally the

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conclusion paragraph

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now let's write our essay based on this

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structure here we go with the

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introduction paragraph

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in today's cosmopolitan world in many

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major cities or countries there are a

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lot of immigrants

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as people travel more now than they ever

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did in the past and populations have had

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to adapt to this transitional lifestyle

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much more quickly than in the past the

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government can do a number of things to

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support this such as offering the proper

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education at schools besides free

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language courses for the immigrants

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so

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in the very first sentence of the

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paragraph we have paraphrased the

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question statement using direct

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synonyms in the following sentences we

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have given the answer to the question

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mentioning the ways the government can

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ensure that these people can live

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together harmoniously

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you should at least mention two because

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we want to get into detail of each in a

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separate paragraph

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however we did not get into any detail

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in this paragraph as this was the

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introduction paragraph and details go in

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the next paragraphs body paragraph 1 and

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body paragraph 2.

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now let's write the first body paragraph

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together

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firstly all governments should insist

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that schools teach history and culture

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from more than one country not just the

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home nation

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this is because by learning how others

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have lived we gain insight into

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alternative cultures and ways of life

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which makes us more accepting when we

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meet people from those countries

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clearly we don't have time to learn

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about the history of every country in

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the world but understanding at least one

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other culture opens our minds and makes

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us more tolerant

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for example

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since the australian schools have

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included the world cultures in their

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curriculum

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aggression among students from different

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cultures have considerably decreased

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so here in the first body paragraph we

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have gotten into detail of the first way

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the government can ensure that all these

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people can live together harmoniously so

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in the very first sentence of the

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paragraph which is the topic sentence we

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have clearly mentioned it and then in

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the following sentences we have given

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some explanation and finally an example

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using the appropriate expressions to

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show each

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and now the next paragraph

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in addition when immigrants choose to

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settle in a country the host government

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should offer free language and culture

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lessons

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this is due to the fact that it is

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impossible for new arrivals to integrate

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if they do not understand the language

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and habits of their new home

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plus it is important for immigrants to

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learn the culture of the place they have

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chosen to settle since by acquiring the

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language and knowledge about the culture

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they will be able to integrate more

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easily and comfortably without

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necessarily losing their own identity

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because of the language courses that

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have been being offered for free in

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bilefield university in germany the

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international students have claimed that

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they feel a stronger sense of self as

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they can interact a lot easier with

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their classmates and the german society

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here in the second body paragraph we

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have zoomed in on the second way the

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government can ensure that all these

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people can live together harmoniously

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in the first sentence of the paragraph

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which is the topic sentence we have

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mentioned it and then in the next

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sentences we have given some explanation

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and an example using some expressions to

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show that for example this one is the

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explanation or the next one is the

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and finally the conclusion paragraph

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in conclusion understanding others is

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the key to harmonious living but proper

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education and free services for the

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immigrants should also be in place to

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protect people from those who can't

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behave responsibly

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eventually in the conclusion paragraph

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we have concluded all the mentioned

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details throughout the essay

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paraphrasing what we had already

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mentioned in the introduction paragraph

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very well guys in this video we took a

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look at writing in the second task of

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ielts exam and learned in details how we

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should write it in order to get our

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desired result

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you can also write your own writing send

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it to our examiners and get a

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comprehensive feedback on the writing

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that you have written

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besides you can get to know the score

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you get in each criteria and your

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overall band score

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you can take a look at the link we have

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put in the video description

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stay tuned for the next videos and

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see you very soon

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in this course you will have a series of

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educational videos in which you will

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learn each and every tip you will need

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in specific details for both general and

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academic modules next question type is

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attached to each video you will have the

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pdf files for each question type

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including the paragraph structure the

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expressions and the techniques you can

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apply which have all been taught in the

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to make sure that you learn everything

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properly in each video we will write an

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essay a letter or a report by using the

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tips that you have learned moreover

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something to help you in this section is

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the different question samples we have

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put for you to write your own writing

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about

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this isn't everything we strongly

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recommend you to use our writing

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correction services as well so that our

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examiner can give you a written and

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video feedback and make sure you're

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ready for the real test join us to

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become our next successful candidate