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hello guys how are you today i hope you

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are doing great

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this is mayor neuschwie from ross ielts

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academy in this video i will teach you

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how to write the details paragraphs in

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academic ielts writing task 1. let's get

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started

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let's have a quick review on the

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paragraph structure of writing task 1.

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first of all we have the introduction

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paragraph we should always be in one

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sentence which is the paraphrasing of

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the question statement

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then we have the overview in two

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sentences

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the details paragraph one and three to

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four sentences

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and details paragraph 2 in 3 to 4

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sentences

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so as we discussed in the previous video

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in the introduction paragraph we should

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only paraphrase the question statement

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in the overview paragraph we should talk

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about the key features

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and in the details paragraphs we should

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get into details of those features for

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example we talk about the main trends

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figures comparisons and differences but

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one of the big problems that many

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candidates have is that they cannot

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realize what exactly is the difference

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between the overview paragraph and the

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details paragraphs

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for example to get a better

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understanding on how exactly these

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paragraphs are different i can give you

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an example of my daily routine

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if i want to give you an overview of my

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daily routine as if it's like an

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overview paragraph i would for example

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say that

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i work out in the mornings

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i hold online courses

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and i spend time with my family

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now i want to mention the same things as

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if they are in the details paragraph

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let's see how i do that

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first i say i go to the gym in the

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mornings to maintain a high fitness

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level and do 50 push-ups to build

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muscles

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after that i go back home to hold my

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online classes and attend university

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seminars

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in the evenings i spend some time with

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my family

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we normally watch movies or cook

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together while talking about our day

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you can see in the overview i only

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talked about the general trends or the

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general things that happened to me and i

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didn't get into any details

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but in the details paragraph i talked

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about the same things the same

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activities that i do but i got more

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specific and i talked about the details

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of those activities

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this is exactly what you should do on

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exam day if you have the overview

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paragraph you shouldn't talk about your

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daily routine but you should talk about

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the given information generally and then

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in the details paragraph you talk about

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the same things but you can just get

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into more details

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we need to learn the differences between

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these three actually paragraphs overview

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and the two details paragraphs because

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many candidates misunderstand those and

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because of that include the details in

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all these paragraphs or even talk about

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the details in the overview paragraph

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which actually lowers their score

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as we have already talked about the

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introduction and overview paragraph in

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the previous video now it's time to talk

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about the details paragraphs and the

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notes and points that we have to take

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into account while writing them

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first of all never report all the data

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you see in the chart because on the one

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hand you don't have enough time and on

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the other as you know the question

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itself in task 1 always asks us to

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summarize the information

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report the main features and give

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example if it's necessary

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support your data in the details

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paragraphs mentioning the figures or

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labels in the chart

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sometimes we get too much into writing

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the sentences that we actually forget to

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mention some obvious but important ones

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in the chart

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maintain a developed process and go on

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logically

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for instance if you start with the first

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level of one process in process diagrams

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and then talk about the last level and

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then go back to the middle ones you

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haven't had an appropriate order which

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will result in a lower score in

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coherence and cohesion that's not

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actually a good result

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and finally only make comparisons when

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it's relevant

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so if you follow these instructions you

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can have a very very good details

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paragraphs in your writing

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